It’s Sunday tomorrow .I’m going to the bookstore with my friends tomorrow morning .We are going to look for some good books .We all like reading books .We are going to eat our lunch at the restaurant. I like chicken, beef and vegetables .After lunch, we are going to the Summer Palace by bus. We are going to play near the Kunming Lake. Maybe we are going to row a boat on the lake .Wow, that will be relaxing. We are coming back at 5pm.
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怎样才称得上是“美好的一天”?有两点不能忘记,一是安排得充实,二是安排得有意义。这两点小作者无疑都想到了,上午去书店看书买书,中午在饭店吃饭,下午去颐和园玩耍、划船,丰富多彩!文章以时间为线索,叙述清楚,文笔也很优美。
小朋友们在写这种叙事的文章时,要尽量给读者交代好时间、地点、人物和活动等,使文章有血有肉。要看好是写过去发生的事情,还是现在正在做的事情,或计划、打算要做的事情,以选择适当的句型。如果是写将来的事情,那么就要注意在表述时多用“be going to 动词原形”这种句型。还有一点也很重要,那就是故事的线索要交代好,让读者在阅读时对整个过程一目了然。
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