It’s spring. It’s time to plant trees.
I want to plant a tree in our garden. Dad and Mum are very happy. They like green. Dad helps me plant the tree. First, we dig the soil. Then I put a little tree into the soil. Next I water it. I am so excited and I wait for the tree to grow. Two weeks later, my tree has some little leaves. I water it every day. Now it has lots of leaves. It grows fast. We should plant more trees. They make our world beautiful.
【要领点评】
小作者写了一次植树的经历,但他并没有单纯拘泥于植树的过程。既有过程,也有感觉,能使文章打动读者,给人以启发。作文的最后一段就非常好,两句话胜似千言万语。我们可以学习一下这种写法。 既描述过程,又适时提自己的看法或想法的写法,在作文中叫做“夹叙夹议”,描述过程为了提出一种思想服务,提出看法或想法使原本平实的描述有了意义。我们在以后的写作中也可以试一试。
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